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Challenge happened in all people’s life, no one ever avoid it. The impact that bring to others
are different, some people go through it and make them stronger, but other jump in to the gap
and never climb back. The most difficult challenge happened in my life is my personality.
This bring a huge difference that I never think about in the past. Before 9 grade, I was a shy
girl who afraid talk to strangers and in public. Rather than finger things out by myself, not
asking someone for help. However, one day that event changed my life. I was at school
waiting for my parents after school, I saw three high school student were bullying a middle
school kid. Stop!! Unfortunately, I was only shout it out in my brain. My legs started to shake,
what should I do? At the same time my mother text me, so I ran away. After I got on the car,
a storm is happening in my mind. All the remorse full in my heart, but I was convicting
myself which there was nothing that I can do. Panicking about they saw me or not and do the
same thing to me, while one voice bring me back from my mind’s chaos. “Is there any go
wrong today?”, my mother asked gently. “No, no, I am good.” I was afraid she know I ran out
from that situation, like a coward. “Well, sine you are not look like anything is right, I still
have to advise you everything will be solved if you face it.” That word is the key of my life.
Face it! No matter what just face it! The next day, I talked to the principal about this and
joined an anti-bully club. I changed, and I will never ignore it.
When I was in middle school, some teachers were worshipping power. Some teacher treated
some students better than other because they can be beneficial from their parents. My friend,
Zoe, was one of the victims. Her teachers let all of her classmates attend his private tutoring,
and they need to pay for it. However, my friend did not attend the tutoring because her parents
had low income and her grades were fine. Few weeks later, every time she had a good grade,
he said she was cheating in front of all the students. Also, when they had a parent’s meeting,
he insulted her parents, said that they did not care about their daughter and they were the
worst parents ever. That is so unfair, the teacher wanted the money so much. Zoe was really
despair, I kept her company and I knew how to help her. Sine I was not at the same school with
her, she had to do the thing that I advised her to do. First, she need to tell her principal about
this because I think that teacher already lost his qualification for being a teacher. Second, she
need to find other students prove that it is true. Money is never the most important thing in
anyone’s life.
Michigan State University (Priority, Not Common APP, DDL: 11/1)
As part of your application for admission, two personal statements are required. Michigan State
University is interested in learning more about your background, talents, and experiences and how
you plan to apply them to your MSU education and future. Your statements may be considered as a
positive factor to enhance your admissibility, as well as for scholarship consideration. Write a short
essay on each of the following personal statement topics below. Each essay should be 200 words or
less.
1. Describe a difficult or challenging situation you have faced. Briefly state the situation, how you
responded and why, would you have done anything differently, did you turn to anyone for help,
and if so for advice, consultation, assistance, and/or encouragement?
2. Briefly describe a situation where you or someone close to you was not treated fairly. What did
you do at the time and why, would you do anything differently, has it impacted or changed who
you are today?
Additional Information (Optional)
Please provide any additional details, circumstances, or qualifications not reflected in the
application for admission.
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