Solved by verified expert:Summary: Summarize the content of all your reviews, both from your peers and from me. Discuss the issues that were mentioned by most of your reviewers, or issues mentioned by only one reviewer. Notice any trends that appear in your feedback.Analysis: Discuss the comments you found helpful or not helpful, and why you found them helpful/not helpful. Notice whether comments seemed out-of-place. Determine whose advice you are planning to use in your revision, as well as whose advice you may not use. Revision Plan: State your goals for revision. Identify three main issues that you plan to address when you revise. Do not include issues like spelling, grammar, or proofreading in this section. see this attach thats I upload
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REVISION PLAN
Select Project:
Project 1 Intermediate Draft
Reviews by Instructor & Peers
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Report View
Instructor:
∠ FENNELL JARAD
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Reviewer Rubric Comments
Criteria Name
Reviewer In-Text Comments
Criteria Comment
Comment
Type
Comment Text
Detailed
Comments
No Comment
Community
Comments
Combine Sentences
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Contractions
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Comma Splice
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Comma Splice
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Capitalization
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Comma Splice
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Combine Sentences
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Comma Splice
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Student:
∠ STUDENT 1
View Peer Review
UNRATED
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Reviewer Rubric Comments
Reviewer In-Text Comments
Comment
Type
Criteria Name
Criteria Comment
Evidence
I liked the sources used in this
article. And the shareholders
were relevant for the issue. The
overall evidence strengthened
your argument.
Format
The in-text citations were
formatted correctly and were in
the right place. and the works
cited page was formatted well
and good.
Endnote
Overall i enjoyed this paper and
liked the content inside. Only
things that I would change is to
revise your compromise to make
it more viable. And to explain a
few things in more detail as
highlighted above. Lastly to fix a
few spelling issues.
Analysis
You analyze very well in this
essay. I like how you spent a
whole paragraph analyzing what
the issues of AI. And how the
quotes were given info before
being put in.
Organization
This essay was organized well. It
was structured in a good way.
intro issue, explain shareholders,
explain issue, intro compromise
and explain.
Style
for the most part your style was
good. The only errors I found
were small spelling errors,
nothing big to worry about.
Comment Text
Detailed
Comments
This is a good way to make people
think but, this specific example is
hard to visualize. I would make it
more detailed.
this compromise looks good on paper
but i don’t know the viability of it
because Your idea is a review
organization. I would think the two
shareholders would just and not get
much done.
It’s spelled Elon Musk.
plural
I would add in an area where you
explain how with this review
organization would help make the
two issues of AI, not such an issue.
Community
Comments
Awkward Sentences
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Incorrect Word Form
(/CommunityComments/Detail/155)
Incorrect Word Form
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Incorrect Word Form
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Incorrect Word Form
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1. How helpful was this feedback?
5
1
2
3
4
5
2. How would you characterize the tone of the feedback?
Too harsh
Too harsh
Neutral
Too kind
Submit Rating
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∠ STUDENT 2
View Peer Review
UNRATED
Reviewer Rubric Comments
Criteria Name
Reviewer In-Text Comments
Comment
Type
Criteria Comment
Analysis
Organization
Your organization is strong and
your ideas all seem to flow in an
orderly manner. You do a good
job of breaking up ideas.
Style
Try to be conscious of your
sentence structures as well as
making sure that the proper
grammar is used where needed.
Be sure to always use formal
diction while writing academic
papers.
Evidence
Be sure to remain consistent with
your references, following the
mla format guidelines for all the
sources. Hanging indentations
should be use for all the sources.
The website links are also not
necessary.
Comment Text
Detailed
Comments
became
using till rather than until seems
informal.
This is awkwardly worded, try
“humans work to make machines
more intelligent” instead
The word “totally” is informal
To make the paragraph flow better
this sentence can be changed or
taken out
grammatically “has” should be
“have”
Combine these two sentences,
replacing the period with a comma
Make sure to use hanging
indentations for all your references
Community
Comments
Proofreading
(/CommunityComments/Detail/67)
Word Choice
(/CommunityComments/Detail/161)
Awkward Sentences
(/CommunityComments/Detail/10)
Format
You have a good paper with a
good topic, there are a few
fixable errors here and there but
you clearly understand the
assignment and present it well
over all. Look out for small
mistakes.
Endnote
1. How helpful was this feedback?
1
1
2
3
4
5
2. How would you characterize the tone of the feedback?
Too harsh
Too harsh
Neutral
Too kind
Submit Rating
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Student’s Revision Plan:
Now that you have received responses from your peers and your instructor, use that personalized feedback to
construct a Revision Plan.
Directons: Using complete sentences, provide answers to prompt questions.
Summary
Analysis
Revision Plan
Summarize the higher-order feedback
you received from your
peers/instructors(s). Note
patterns/contradictions.
What peer/instructor feedback
will inform your revision? Be
specific and provide rationale.
Based on your self-review and peer/instructor
reviews, detail the steps you will take to
improve the quality of your writing project.
Submit
Grade the Revision Plan:
Instructor Overall Comment
Instructor Grade
Not Graded Yet
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